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if you cant read it here it is: StarStruck A love story Chapter one: meeting Everything has been so different since kanae died .... Shinazugawa started to act rudely, or, to put it bluntly, more rudely to me.Two new people joined the hashira’s ranks after she died as well, one of them i recognise as Kanae’s younger sister, but she acts very different from Kanae’s description….. Kanae’s death must have affected her greatly….I believe her name was Shinobu? Nevermind that, I'll figure it out. The other one who joined was a boy…He’s…..Energetic, i’ll give him that. “Hello there!” a calm voice said. “........” I don’t know what to say……nobody really talked to me except kanae….do i just say hi? “Are you going to answer me? It's quite rude to ignore people you know.” The calm voice said. “......hello.” I said reluctantly. She smiles “well, it’s nice to meet you…..hmm, i apologize, I never got your name! Mine is Shinobu Kocho. You?” She said with a bright smile that reminded me of someone…..though i can’t think of who at the moment…. “My name is Giyuu Tomioka….Nice to meet you….Kocho..” I say. We talked for a few more hours until we both had to leave for missions..Later I saw the other newbie. He seems older than Kocho. Maybe 19-ish? Here he comes… “HELLO THERE FELLOW HASHIRA!!!” He says. Very loudly I must add… “Hi…..” I replied. “MY NAME IS KYOJIRO RENGOKU! WOULD YOU LIKE TO JOIN ME FOR SOME SWEET POTATO MISO SOUP!?” He’s…..surprisingly intimidating..but at the same time….comforting- “DID YOU HEAR ME?” He booms enthusiastically. “Yes. Yes, I did. And I have to decline your request..I already have plans…” “REALLY? WITH WHO? IF YOU DON’T MIND ME ASKING OF COURSE!!!!” “.....Private..It's private.” “OK!!! I’LL SEE YOU LATER HASHIRA!!!” Chapter Two: Just two friends hanging out….right? I let a chuckle slip out as I am walking away, what an odd guy… “Were you smiling tomioka-san? You have a cute smile!” She giggles. I blush a bit, but I have to keep up my appearance, so I attempt to hide it…..I think I failed horribly… “You're so adorable when you're happy tomioka-san…now, shall we? I found the perfect spot to watch the stars, a place that has been confirmed to have no demons whatsoever. Ready?” “......Yes.” It takes a while to walk there, but it was totally worth it. The Stars were beautiful… Almost as beautiful as her……Her face was lit up by the beautiful dark pinks and blues, her purple eyes looked like they were glowing- “Tomioka-san?” “hm?” “You were staring at me for quite a while Tomioka-san…..” “...I apologize Kocho..” “It’s alright.” We stopped talking for a while, all we did was point out really cool and bright stars.